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Shattered: One Amongst The Dunes :iconwhite-mantis:White-Mantis 2,830 97 Zootopia - An Adventure in Zootropolis P01 :iconrobertfiddler:RobertFiddler 157 22 ZPD's Party Night - 01 :iconborba:borba 374 92 Proud Comic Page 2 :iconkulkum:Kulkum 91 3
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Nick's Captive Christmas Comic :iconkulkum:Kulkum 135 6
sssssss :iconcatelman:catelman 101 10 Sunderance - Chapter 1: Carrots and Blueberries :iconthewyvernsweaver:TheWyvernsWeaver 362 68
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The Feral Mask Part 1 (The Broken Mask AU) :iconkulkum:Kulkum 77 36
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The Savage Dark Chapter 1 :iconkulkum:Kulkum 122 56
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The Broken Mask :iconkulkum:Kulkum 134 27
Jackie Hopps: Swimsuit Tease :icongrummancat:GrummanCat 218 72 Judy hopps hug :iconthezentlion:THEZENTLION 374 37 Zootopia Comic | Page 16 :iconemberlarelle276:EmberLarelle276 251 104

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Sol-Vikar Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, thanks for the fav!  Please lemme know your thoughts.
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InsidiousAgent Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2015
You're welcome.

Dude, It's hands down one of the best ME related fics I've read. I mean, there are typos and stuff but nothing that takes away from the experience.

Your portrayal of turians in general and turian women especially is stellar. There are too few such depictions around I'd say, and it is good to see someone put out such a great piece as yours.
I'd also like to point out that having the image of turian women in various... situations, in your head is not safe for work=P. At all.

Don't stop doing the smut parts too though because there are ways to do that in such a way as to add much to the story and to make it tasteful even when graphic, which you manage to pull off splendidly.
Good smut adds a lot to a romance arc.
You're also good with the technobabble, something which I must confess I'm really bad at myself and thus envy your ability to write it in a plausible manner.
Probably because I'm not interested in such myself so writing it doesn't come naturally to me at all.

The characters in your story feel like real people, especially the more flawed ones, and I'm probably gonna develop a fanboy crush on Alarees unless I give reading your fic a rest for a few days=P.
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Sol-Vikar Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!  Yea, I've gone back a few times and I have tried to fix all the grammar/typos and stuff.  It's very much a work in progress XD.

Haha what situations could you possibly mean?! :P  On a serious note, the smutty stuff is more toy try my hand at it since I've never done it before.  There's one scene I'm going to axe from the story since it doesn't really fit the chars.  Ree is fairly assertive in her needs/wants, but at that point she's still kinda "Ew" about humans.  But thank you for noticing!  I try to make it fit since its about learning/exploring one another and trust as it is about them doing the dirty.

But the techno stuff I try to ground in reality as much as possible given my experiences, I think it adds a bit of depth and realism when the reality of the world is clearly defined.  It can also keep you from using "god mode" and forces you to write out situations that have to be considered carefully by the characters.

But once again thank you so much!  Feel free to comment along the way or ask questions!  I am actually in the middle of writing part 2 (Which has slowed due to personal/medical issues) 
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